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So ends chapter 10. Two more chapters and then the first act will be done!
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Panel 1 [Pulled back shot of everyone at the table as Charles looks pensively at his wine glass]
CHARLES:
I do hope, however, that this voyage is successful enough that it’ll be my last. I want to be able to watch him grow up. It’s been a fine journey with you all, but I’ve learned that land holds the sublime, too.
Panel 2 [Mathews looks a bit indifferent, picking food out of his teeth]
MATHEWS:
Pardon for sayin’, but the only works of the Lord I care t’see are the ones that can be cooked down into oil.
Panel 3 [Barzillai concluding the conversation and the meal, his plate empty before him as he decisively jabs one finger down at the table]
BARZILLAI:
And that will be our iron focus, so we can bring each man here into his personal Paradise, whatever that may be.
Panel 4 [Narrow zoomed in panel showing the table spread, empty plates, crumpled napkins, silverware leaning against the edge of plates.]
CHARLES:
I do hope, however, that this voyage is successful enough that it’ll be my last. I want to be able to watch him grow up. It’s been a fine journey with you all, but I’ve learned that land holds the sublime, too.
Panel 2 [Mathews looks a bit indifferent, picking food out of his teeth]
MATHEWS:
Pardon for sayin’, but the only works of the Lord I care t’see are the ones that can be cooked down into oil.
Panel 3 [Barzillai concluding the conversation and the meal, his plate empty before him as he decisively jabs one finger down at the table]
BARZILLAI:
And that will be our iron focus, so we can bring each man here into his personal Paradise, whatever that may be.
Panel 4 [Narrow zoomed in panel showing the table spread, empty plates, crumpled napkins, silverware leaning against the edge of plates.]
Aaaaaaa!!!! Happy new year!!! I personally LOVE dialogue so this is EXCELLENT! Your writing is so interesting, all the characters so clearly have their own voices! That’s one of the things I tend to struggle with in my own writing, so its really cool to see it well done. I love the ship’s commentary, taunting and ominous. This is such a cool comic, seriously.
Thank you! My dialogue writing methods is mostly just…walking around my apartment talking to myself in different voices haha.