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My usual last minute update! And the start of chapter 9.
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Panel 1 [In the dark, Ezra’s hand is grabbing Lawrence’s shoulder to wake him as he sleeps in the bunk.
EZRA:
Mr. Manner,
Panel 2 [Same shot—Lawrence startles awake, Ezra pulling his hand back.]
Panel 3 [View from Lawrence’s perspective of Ezra, looking slightly apologetic]
EZRA:
Sorry.
Watch change—you didn’t hear the bells.
Panel 4 [Lawrence is blearily crawling out of the bunk as Ezra starts to walk away from him to go back above deck]
LAWRENCE:
It’s still dark.
EZRA:
You’re gonna have t'get used to that.
EZRA:
Mr. Manner,
Panel 2 [Same shot—Lawrence startles awake, Ezra pulling his hand back.]
Panel 3 [View from Lawrence’s perspective of Ezra, looking slightly apologetic]
EZRA:
Sorry.
Watch change—you didn’t hear the bells.
Panel 4 [Lawrence is blearily crawling out of the bunk as Ezra starts to walk away from him to go back above deck]
LAWRENCE:
It’s still dark.
EZRA:
You’re gonna have t'get used to that.
I just caught up — I’m so excited to see where this goes! I remember seeing your posts about reworking it yonks ago and was really keen to read it.
Woohoo, thanks so much for reading!